by Lost & Delirious Sep 14, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
The world is leaving me behind, |
This poem is simple, yet very effective. Wording is excellent, and I like it from the beginning to the end. |
by Darien
Hmm, that word "Cause" caused me a lot of problems.. lol haha, umm yeah, it just didn't seem to flow well with this poem. Maybe try 'and' instead?.. hmm dont know.. whatever you like. |
I can really relate!keep it up,5/5 |