by shawn hoskins Sep 15, 2005
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
Everyone feels sad and down at times,like theres nothing to look forward to or nothing more to give, sometimes it feels like the days go on forever, The darkness never lights up and things get worser than ever.Sometimes you feel like there's nothing good about tomorrow, so you drown yourself in all your sorrows, you hope things in your life won't stay the same, hoping somehow you can make a change. I wrote this poem because this once was me, just keep your head up and soon you'll see, The demons that have held you down, will soon be gone and you'll finally see the beautiful person you've been all along. |
Wow...u really amazes me with this piece...so beautifully written that words can never describe it... |
5/5..This one was so much better...Except...The opener, you just like it had it's own little flow that I thought you were gonna stick with then Wam Bam, you changed up with the curve ball and threw in the rhyming again...I liked it though...GOod Job, |