by Kurt Sep 15, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
My hear is broken in two |
by Jenni Marie
I adore the wording used in this...simply beautiful. |
by jess
This poem is great! the words describe everything perfectly!! i like uoer work and ill add you to my faves!! keep up the brill work! nd p.s thanx 4 checking out my work!! xxx |
by BrokenMisery
Excellent. Your description was great! "Vicious wordsâ€,†poisonous lies", "mournful chorus" were all great in expressing your feelings. Be careful with typos, for example "hear" in the first line. Also, did you mean to have commas in the line "Lonely depressed broken jealous", if you did, it is useful to put them in next time, simply because it helps to show what you mean. |