Oh my god.. this poem is fantastic.. out of all your peoms i can't see how this isn't the most highly rated... it took my breath away, YOU have the way with words.

Amy...X

You said in your profile that you wanted people to read this poem. I can see why. I really like the way you write. You're very gifted. take care xoxo

I FOUND IT! i love this poem its soo beautiful. As i read it i got shivers up my spine... t'was amazing and i loved every word of it! i cant say that i liked the beginning most, or the end most... because i just loved it all!!! you also used original metaphor-type thingsss... like the little boy and the lazy cat haha... like i already stated lol.... B E A U tiful!
xo adge

That is a great poem and i think u have great talent and the poem is so true!!! check some of mine if u could!

I lovvve it. Good style, excellent depth this is brilliant. XXLISSA

I can say that i do love this poem its a little diffrent and thats what i like about it. keep up the good work and what not 5/5

Excellent. Very deep. 5/5

-Taylor

This is good....xoxo xoox i loved this poem....
thanks a bunch for hte comment

yeah im deffinitly gonna keep it up..i actually wrote a new poem today durin spansish cuz i got bored outta my mind...but i shouldve payed attention bcuz i have a quiz in there tomro.....lol...hope to talk more...

xoxo
elissa

Your such an amazing poet xxxxx

This is AMAZING! i really can not explain how much talent you have.

Wow, its reafreshing to read something that has truth and logic.You took this poem as fairy tale and twisted it with reality.Beautiful.Your a great writter.

Corie

Well.
arent you just amazing.
i wish i could put my feelings out half as well.

I think it's pretty original. The way you were able to include all these different moments in time without breaking the rhythm and flow is astounding.
You convey a pretty valid message, the world has lost touch with reality it's as if we're going backwards instead of evolving further.
Quite thought provoking piece...
Take care and keep it up~Holly

WOW
thats all i got
but i REALLY REALLY love this one
so real...yet so fake
~Emma

Thought i would be nice and read some of your stuff.
Your criticism is taken well and i shall try hard to write something along the lines of a "subject" you might like. JUst thought i'd also add that although this poem has very good description and imagery, the subject i thought has been overwritten into insensibility and has been done many times before, nice try though ;)

This it great. I love it

Excellent. Excelsior.

I really liked t. well written! i can relate except that i'm not a boy. lol.
but very good indeed

I really liked this poem I think it was mostly the style you use that I was drawn too. And if you want to see a story in my poem, you should play the game. Plus I would recommend it highly. Trust me there's a story there. Keep up the good work, i look forward to more of your poems..

I loved this poem.