Really, really, REALLY good

congrats, you really have a great writing style. nice flow

5/5

Love it! PERFECT POEM. enough said.

I liked this poem a lot!!!!!!! very nicely written. check out mine sometime... <3 Bubles

This poem left me speachless...breathless! wow it is such an amazing poem with great style. I related to this poem with great amount...i just changed boy to girl--lol! Fantastic Job!!

Thanks for your comment on "Empty Life"...and now I see why you said it reminded you of this one. It's truly sad what we've done to our planet and society in general...but lessons don't seem to be learned until it's too late :(
5/5

Very well written.the flow is very good.5/5

I really liked this. it felt real. very nice. check mine out sometime =) ~bubbles~

Very very good i love it:)

Beautiful poem. great message. so much depth and understanding of the world in this piece. basically every line had new meaning and was so intricately worded that the entire poem was just wonderful. it all came together flawlessly and it is extremely extremely well done. 5/5 forsure!

and hey if u get a chance read and comment some of my stuff sometime. thx :)

Dark, nicely so. Great poem.

Thanks for your input on my poem, too. It helped.

S.K.

Excellent. I love the stories you tell in your writing, the imagery and pictures that form in my head while reading it. Your writing is so witty and original. I love it. 5/5 from me.

Well i can honestly say, the world has gone crazy. I really enjoyed this write, i thought it was very imaginative. You used all different examples, from people to cats. I liked that idea. The flow was quite good, as was the rhyming. It was a good piece and if i have time i will read the extended version.
5/5

Great poem!! X]

I liked the idea behind this poem and it's one I can relate to. These lines were the ones that jumped out at me most, 'When the glowing light leads you astray
And the evil begins to feel good
When your mind turns and starts to play
Games that no mind should'

Good write!

I like this. the first stanza reminds me of one of my poems 'fairytale', except this was a lot better. its like the oposite of what should be.

exxxcept at the end when you ruined your perfect grammar and said "coz". that killed me.

This was so well written! I love how you actually managed to start majority of your sentences with "when..." That is pretty tough to do, i mean all the repetition and stuff!! So kudos for that! I also really love the ending. As i was reading it, i was wondering where this was going and how it would end, but then once it got to the end everything just made complete sense !

This was an amazing write !

I really do like this one. With what was conveyed and the way you used word play it was very nice. Well done.

This was an amazing poem (:
i loved it

I really enjoyed the line "And has the seen become unseen". It reminds me of the Narnian spell Lucy recites to "Make the Unseen Seen" :)

One thing I really didn't like is when you used the word "cuz". My mother was an english teacher so it really grinds my gears when people don't use correct grammar.

Wow. Captivating from start to finish. Love how you paint darkness in society.