Ok at first i didnt understand what this was about but after i kept reading i understood more. that was good

Ok well first of all good, good because the rhyming went great and seemed effortless. That's usually hard to do.
but a little less good because there was a swear but don't worry, no biggie. And it bugs me when people don't use punctuation. Kinda near the end it seemed to go downhill but still good. I'm gonna give it a 4.5 lol but thats not possible so I'm going with 5:)

Throughout this poem, it seems as if you don't stay grounded...Kindof like you go from one opinion to the other and mix them together...It's almost like you didn't set yourself a guideline for the poem at all...You know what I mean kinda...I give it a 4/5...I give you the four for the plain fact of the benefit of doubt, that maybe I just didnt see your reasoning....I normally would have given it a 3 but, benefit of the doubt, maybe I'm just to dumb to understand
-ash-

This was awsome....so deep....you do so good at showing emotions....especialy since you really arnt feeling it...it is kinda weird....but i loved it haha that just shows how weird i am....sorry i'd love to say something bad about it....make it feel like im acutally saying something....but i cant...i think it was pretty much perfect from whati can see 5/5

*Claps* I really loved this. It took the form a vampire story, and me being how I am, I love vampires. It flowed wonderfully, so don't pay attention to anyone who rated you lower than a 5. They're just jealous. ;)_

Sheena

I actually really liked this one alot, I got nothing negative to say about it, it was well written and kept me on the edge of my seat the whole time, while reading it, I think you did a great job, 5/5

I really like this one too...5/5 Great job! You have talent...ill be waiting to read more!
Becky
xoxo