Wow, that was fantastic, you create such a romantic feeling and then it flows so well into the end where shes gone, it reads itself and is addictive, enticing, entrancing and a whole relationship in one poem. Just one thing the line 'fingers running thru each and every silky strand of your hair' seems to be a little too detailed, but otherwise it is an exquisite piece that I'd love to see published.

Okay i did enjoy reading this your vocabulary is right on...very well done

i sit here caressing the part of yourself that you left with me, the part of myself you chose to neglect

those were the best lines i think

okay since the format you chose to write this poem (no stanzas) did make this difficult to read i could really tell what you were trying to do with the rhyme scheme or if you were even trying to have one...i thought i could sense some rhyming at the beggining and end but hard to tell

so the only real advice i can give to this poem that could be of any help is perhaps put it into stanzas that way it is actually more readable and what not...

Oh wow, that was really amazing. The only thing I didn't like about your poem was that it's kind of hard to read, just being in that one paragraph. I don't know if you meant it to be that way, but it might be better if you divided it up. Besides that, I think you expressed this poem beautifully. Take care.
> Kiesha

5/5 it was very good you got some big words in there

Wat to go i love it:)

Wat to go i love it:)

I have read a lot of amazing poems on this site. A lot very deep and meaningful ones. But i must say, this is my favorite. Just wow... i dont know what it is about this piece... it captivates every part of me. Its like a beautiful dream and i can relate with this so much. You have this incredible talent and i can feel your personality seeping through the words of this poem. It is just beautiful, your words... everything. Exquisite and i dont know why it touched me so much, because ive read so many and none have touched me like this. It filled me with emotion. Never stop writing, you're a truly gifted person. If you want u can read one of mine too. Again, brilliant work.

Btw.. thats an amazing pic in your profile. Did you draw that? I love to draw, its beautiful.

Ana

I don't read poems that aren't in stanza form, infact this is the first poem I've ever read on here that is not in a 'format', but the first line made me want to read more. You have captured and portrayed your feelings so well here, everything is tangible, and I think setting it out like this works well because it reads like a stream of conciousness - an excellent poem :)