I read this one too and I gotta say that it is a 5 all the way. I found it to be very deep. Great Job

Great poem - you could have tried breaking it up a little - a mistake I make with many of mine - but it reads well as it is too! Such a devoted poem.

Peace. [Sole]

Interesting poem, different rhyming scheme, overall a great heartfelt poem, great keep up the good work!!

I can so relate to this poem that it's sad. I love how you put it forth, your feelings and everything. I've tried to write a poem in the same direction, just not this forward. It's called Thought of Revenge. It is about the same, just it only evolves around my feelings.

Anyway, I'm rambling... :P I like the writing style, it really tie it all together. Good work.

*BrokenToy

This is a beautiful poem, even for your first one. Like I said, you've got great talent for your age. I would give you the name of my first poem, but all of my poems are in a notebook at home. I used to have them all on here, but my account got suspended for putting a poem that I got in an email on the site. ---i thought other people should read it :/---- well, I'll start slowly putting them back on the site.

Thanks for your interest though.

Good job 5/5 as always!

I thought it was okay. For a first poem it was really good *better then most of the poems I've written before my new ones* I think you could have broken it up and maybe went more in depth with the details but with personal poems I tend to judge them a bit on a different level.

You have a really great tallent .
This was a very very deep poem
Love it!

5/5

~Mz.Raven

P.s Thanx for da comments