Amazing poem...lots of feeling...a little suspence

God this person above im sorry i hate people who leave silly comments like that GRR

this poem was EXTREMLEY choppy like none of it flowed at all...this is so simply fixed though honestly take the time read it through and add 2 or 3 sentences where they need to be added

Good poem but it could use a better flow to it

Sadly I have to be a broken record here. It's very chaotic. It tells the story well and contains some good imagery, but could use some work.

No rhyme, choppy, yet still is good and gives you a good picture in your head of what is happening...5/5 good job
Becky
xoxo