A poem

A poem bout a poem...now thats new...hahaha...i like the way you think...i hope to see more...good work:D

Thanks for the advice. I changed stanza one to abcb rhyme scheme, but the last stanza, is fghg. Maybe it's a difference in accents and pronounciations.
Which areas do you think I could improve the flow on?

Hey i'd give u 5/5 is good job but u can better the flow..
pls vote & comment on :murder or suicide" i'd be grateful

Ok, this was a fairly good poem. The rhyme scheme was not very consistent, but still very good: you start using this scheme- abab, then cded, ffgf, which does not help to the development of the theme. Anyways, though structurally random, the diction used was precise and to the point: you explain what poetry does! That is good. The message is more than clear, and I do not see many grammatical errors. Nice job! I would give this a 9/10, but since we vote up to 5, you get a well deserved 5. Nice going!