The butterfly didn't seem to be similar in reguards to the person. You may wish to use closer links and/or explain better how they link. The use of metaphors, similes and description could really enhance your ideas. Try to get a similar meter even if you choose not to rhyme, because it might flow better. You had some strong emotions and good ideas. Keep writing and practicing.
luv kt.

I think tht poems is really good, like broken misery said try to find a few more thing to compare to the object (the butterfly) and a little more flow, but honey i loved it anyway! You make me feel so sad whenever i read these poems of yours!!! You make me want to cry i know how you feel chin up i am here beside you!