I love it, i just really liked this one i have nothing to say bad because i dont want to repeat myself again and again this was touching, i loved the concept some parts didnt rhyme as i think you intended at the end but 5/5 really good

"he's to far gone now to change his ways"
it should be 'too' not 'to'

Concept-wise I'll say that certain aspects of it were certainly impressive. Grammer-wise, you have many things you could improve upon. If you're going to have it all together like that, you might as well format it correctly, and add commas where there should be pauses, and add periods where sentences should end. if you were shooting for a complete stream of consciousness poem, then i'd suggest just removing all of the commas in the entire poem.