Wow. it actually sounds like a song, it was really good. i think personally its kinda hard to rhyme each line but you did it and it sounds awesome.

Really good

Okay this was a good poem the beggining started strong and end fineshed week....

Your confident in me has faded,
So my body now has been traded,

that was the biggest flow break to me i think

and i think simple be rearraging the words to
*and now my body has been traded* makes it flow so much nicer but hey just a a thought

there were many other flow breaks in the bottom half of the poem you should be able to point them out to yourself....

Make me dream of nights so bright,
This blood, this dream, my kryptonite.

those lines were nice, really good, true poetry right there, good job

4/5

I love these types of poems, they always have so much emotion into them, especailly this one, it had a nice flow to it and a nice idea, it fits perfectly, well done

This was a very heart felt & very well writtin, I do suggest you proof read it though...

"I tried to grab on but but instead fell."
&
"Your confident in me has faded,"

I read it the first time and missed the fact that you wrote "confident" and was saying confidence.

Wow! thta was amazing! I get amazed by poets who rhyme every two lines and have the flow perfect and no rhyming forced, and you didnt fail to amaze me! that was amazing! i've tried doing something like this and i suck at it!! that was awesome! my suggestion: break it up into every two lines! good write!! 5/5 for sure!!

I love this poem, excellent flow and deep emotion. I know how you feel. Thank you for the votes/comments hun, i means so much to me. 5/5

Normally, mostly, I dislike cutting poems. But this can't really be classified as that kind of poem...lol...It's got a greater meaning.

I have to say this poem is in the 1% of poems that I can read on this subject...Even though I just explained...blah blah blah...

Anyway, good write, truly.

Very good i liked it flowed very good 5/5

I find your work is pretty good, however the structure was a bit off putting, so try to break them up into stanzas. I also found you could also describe things more with imagery to make them more interesting. You are a good author and I wish you the best of luck in the future.
Peace.

Wow...i think this is my favorite poem! its so good...5/5 Great job with this one!
Becky
xoxo

There is something about certain words that just seduces the mind, and kryptonite is one of them.

It touched the darker side of my mind, and I could almost see the dark green glow, blood, falling...
really, really good imagery.

//T.L.//

Great job. Very sad but a great piece.
I like this part the most:

Make me dream of nights so bright,
This blood, this dream, my kryptonite.

This poem is so sad because it talks about a person going through so much pain and suffering.

Awesome job writing this.

>black&&blue

Beautiful peice of poetry. I love it. 5/5

As always~ Kate

I love all the falling imagery which leads to a 'fall' at the end.
Wonderful rich writing.

Great write it was very descriptive, and the flow was okay.........

Very nice though,
-ann

Yet another great poem. i love your writng, even though all that i have read so far are sad, they are very good. keep them coming.
Driver

Love it love it love it! Omg really this one is so awesome it's like..true and wow. I am rambling about it and I have no idea what I am really saying accept "I love it" and "Wow!" Haha. xD Keep up the work Hun. ^-^

This is another strong poem! loved it! i love reading poems about razors and stuff! but i cant write them! donno why lol

keep it up!

U are the best