I love this poem, it has so much emotion.. but what happened..?

It was a very short poem, but it flowed very well. It could have had more depth, but your message was still sent clearly. Good emotion and voice. Keep it up, you have a lot of potential. =)

~rolo

Wow, tht was so cool, full of emontion and well a bit a mystery, cos i mean wot the hell happened? lol 5/5
Becca xx

Awww misses this is pretty damn sad

OH, that a nice poem, haha, make more, and i will comment, huggels u

That's really sad!!!! good poem though:) 5/5

Awesomeness bj. ur an awesome poet! keep on writing!

Hey huni i hope ur okay, keep writing, ur great at it, comment on my poems, i hope we can b friends

luv always mAaddison xxx

I gave u 5/5 cuz there's no 10/5 ... was beautiful,intense & touching !! am going thru the same problem... mine for 16 yrs... u might wanna read "murder or suicide" & i'd love to know wht u think bout it ....
love
amy

I really liked that one!! it made me sad since i know what happened. :( great poem though!!

Oh honey thats so sad, mwa i hope ur ok , but ur a gr8 writer and good at expessing urself

Wow bj u really hav a gift for poetry i love that poem it rox!!!

Wow bj u really hav a gift for poetry that poem rox!!!

As others have said: "that poem rox" and "excellent poem". This was truly fantastic. I would change the slang, you use ·"cuz" a lot, but that is your style, and I respect it. Apart from that, I like this poem a lot. It is full of powerful diction, and excellent imagery. In short, this is wonderful. Good job.

Awww thast a great poem BJ i hope that he does rot in hell for watever he did to u . keep up the great work u got a 5/5/ from me love yah sweetheart

Awwwwwwwwwwww huni that is so sad u have a gr8 writing talent keep it up babe

Awwwwwwwwwwww huni that is so sad u have a gr8 writing talent keep it up babe

Yes, the rhyme was great, and that it had a story was very, very good...all in all, a ten out of five...quite the best.

Good Writing!
beth

I havnt read the other poem but im guessing it's about rape, hehe it'll be exciting to se if im right lol. well anyways great poem the rhymes were perfect never flawed the flow was great as always 5/5

That was reli gud.. wonderful expression of emotion and ur messge was sent 'crystal clear' :D
gr8 job.. hope ur OK
Nannoush