Comments : Dare To Call It Love?

  • 19 years ago

    by x Saiya

    Pretty good. I give it a 4/5 overall

    "If only I could live in your dreams and stay in your daydreams too.
    If only I could be the reason you smile every morning that you're late to school.
    If only I could be the last person in your mind before falling asleep."

    Some suggestions I have would be maybe to change those lines around a little.. example:
    "If only I could live in your dreams and your daydreams too
    If only I could be the reason you smile, the reason that you’re late to school
    If only I could be the last person in your mind before you fall asleep."

    Saiya