Wow,it was so sad and so touching.The hardest thing in life is getting away from someone you really love.

Good job5\5...

I saw a lot of things in here that I'd change but I won't point them out because it's obvious to see that you have improved in writing and have already fixed the probelms in this poem but not doing them in other poems. I do like how easy this was to understand. Your emotions were cleary expressed here and really hit the reader hard. I can see that your talent has grown and that makes me so happy. You are a brillant writer and it's great to see what has come from years of work. Nice poem hun :) Nik

I don't think I've ever read any of your early works before, sissums. I really like this one. :-) Even as a beginning writer (where you just startiong?) you can still deliver a good message with good imagery. ^.^ Nice job, Myryn!