Inviting Affliction

by keep n touch   Sep 21, 2005


Her eyes exhibit a cinnamon brown glimmer
With sleek raspberry hair to compliment
She struck my curiosity with her bubble gum lips
So soft, so smooth, so lustrously slick

The way she swayed her hips side to side
Revealed clusters of intimacy on her firmly-toned body
In the skin tight shorts and width-less strapped shirt
She seemed so confident, at the same time cocky

With all the right things, in all the right places
I don't blame her for being self-assured
She shows off her stuff; the guys can't get enough
So why not use her demeanor to lure

I know in abundance of her arrogant past
The lunch-line whispers and the hallway chatter
Convey the biography in every detail
But I can't say i care; rumors don't matter

I want to find out truths from fiction myself
That's why I managed to set up a date
Just me, and her, & the Eagle's Nest salad bar
This is my chance, I can't afford to make mistakes

I'm so nervous; what am i supposed to say?
Beads of sweat slowly recede down my face
With failure in sight, my voice trembles and cracks
As i sharply declare, "Let's get outta this place"

It's uncomfortable surrounded by all these nicely dressed people
I'll take you somewhere I can be myself
So I escorted her to a baseball game
A perfect place for those without svelte

I guess my spontaneity must have paid off
For blurry weeks came dazzling by
I kept her guessing, never looking ahead
Now I'm the one guessing on what she tried to imply

For some uncanny reason, I knew this was impending
She left for some guy with a new Cadillac
I should've stopped at the first indication
She was too inviting, I couldn't hold back

Damn did it hurt, when she spoke these words
And verified clearly my predictions
It is now undeniably a fact
She's simply a beautiful affliction

Lacking compassion, she divulged:
"cry me a river"
"build me a bridge"
"I'm sorry to tell you"
"this is how life really is"

If anybody see an exquisite girl
with piercing brown eyes & creamy dark skin
I give you this advice, her middle name's trouble
But guys can't resist the most inviting affliction

9/20/2005

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  • 16 years ago

    by KJ

    Absolutely amazing!
    I loved everything about this poem, starting with the flow. Great job on expressing your thoughts with the imagery you used. Perfect describing words:

    "Her eyes exhibit a cinnamon brown glimmer
    With sleek raspberry hair to compliment
    She struck my curiosity with her bubble gum lips
    So soft, so smooth, so lustrously slick"
    ^^this first stanza is what really stuck out the most for me. i really liked the way you started off catching my attention. i read this stanza and i wanted to read more. loved it

    Also, your voice in this cries for praise =)
    Overall, perfectly and beautifully written
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Deana

    An outer beauty is good but an inner beauty is even better, guess we all find that out the hard way! great poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    That's an excellent poem. That quoted part sounds like the conversation I had with my girl 3 girlfriends ago. She was a real heartbreaker. Girls are such a drag.

  • 18 years ago

    by brittany

    Wow thats a wounderful poem i loved it:) keep up the great wrk

  • 18 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Geez ur poems take a long time 2 read..lol. anyway, sry u didnt get a top place in my contest, but u are an excellent writer. this poem showd feeling very strongly...5/5 4 sure!
    ~*Who Cares?*~