Undoubtedly one of my favorites from you, very well done....although I might suggest a little reform on the final line...something like "This constant pain will never heal." perhaps. Anyway, I absolutely love it.

My favorite part is

i feel the ice run through my veins
revealing all my hidden pains

it just rhymed so perfectly and flowed so wonderfuly i absolutly loved it....great poem...cant find n/e thingwrong w/ it! 5/5

Excellent poem! 5/5 ^_^

Thats so sad! 5/5

Very sad...and depressing. you are very talanted. keep up the good work...5/5

dawn

Very dark, your poems are different than i am used to reading. its good.

Hey...awesome poem, i really liked the 3 stanzas in the middle..great job i can really relate much love Steph

This is the first poem ive read of yours that has flowed perfectly great job i loved this poem you have a GREAT vocab very cool....5/5

This poem deserves more recognition. an absolute profound job.

"Shadows swirl in my crimson eye
my heart pours as I cry
my soul is dead yet I feel
This constant pain will never heal"

This stanza differently did for me.

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Shadows swirl in my crimson eye
my heart pours as I cry
my soul is dead yet I feel
This constant pain will never heal

is the best lines i've read on the site...
5/5

Ur in my favs 5/5

I love that last stanza.
Wow, it was just amazingly good.

5/5

Saiya (The same person as Forever Saiya--just changed my name :D)

Thats very beautifully written. well done
if you ever need someone to talk to taht can relate to waht you feel .. talk to me..if you would please check out some of my poems...keep up the good work :)

This is really good.. great work n_n

Wow.. i love your work.. comment on some of my poems.. if you want.. it would be great.. 5/5

Every single poem you write it feels to me as if your whole heart goes into it, and that's the best possible thing for a writer to create great poetry...and that's exactly what you do.

Rave!

Wow.
another Great.
Again so original, dont know how you do it.
5/5
~Emah