Another great poem...keep it up...l8r, jen

Very good and emotional good job 5/5

Great poem i loved it 5/5

This is a very "different" poem; I liked the subject and how you set the poem out like a story. Only problem I feel with this is the same as before, you repeat yourself and you don't need to. Also because the lines are quite lengthy, you need to make sure the flow stays constant. It was good for the most of it, but in places, it let you down. Apart from that, though it was written quite well. You use vocabulary nicely too, so that really helps strengthen the poem.

Ok I’ll explain the meaning of my poem now. As you may have guessed my poetry is rarely straightforward. The poem is about depression in general. It’s about the feeling that you’re falling (in life) and asking for help but no one seems to understand. The “flying pigs” is there to change the subject of the poem, just as people do when the person in the poem asks for help. The reference to “having no reflection” means they might as well be invisible because no one cares. Maybe if you re read it keeping this in mind it may make more sense. Thanks for the comment.

Hmmm...the imagery of the perfec scen was ...well....perfect.

"And every day was just as good as the rest,
My family was happy and so was I,
A fantasy that I wish was so very true,
But I was only dealt a slice of life's pie,"

This was my favourite stanza, but I especially heart the last line.=)

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

The last line - great imagery! Though a very sad meaning, so I shouldn't get too exited - oh, what the heck!! Amazing poem! I loved it so much, the rhymes came off a little at points, out and without sounds a bit wrong - but it was so lovely and easy to read - so sad and . . .and . . . and . . . I'm speechless!!

Peace. [Sole]