Well, sadly i dont think i fully perceived the depth of this, as i dont know the name cho cho san... but other than that, this is really a good poem.. i like the repeat of the third poem, and how it only changes a little in the fifth line.. however.. it seems like the end could use one more line on those particular stanza.. for whatever reason, i think its because of the lines:

free to fly, fly
fly away?

it just seems like the lines would be more fitting with one extra line,.. this is a very smooth read, and i love the lack of rhymes.. i wish i could give you more help, but thats all i can think of.. i admire the way you chose to end it, really captures and wraps the whole feeling of the rest of the poem.. goodjob..

It should be - repeat of the third stanza*.. my fault.. i dunn0 where my head was.. lol ne way pZ out

Good poem i really loved it 5/5

Dude, i'm gonna go look up that play now. I think your poem is great btw.

Aken Sol

I've never seen the play, but I would like to someday. Good job on creating a poem inspired/based on a famous ballet. Great write!