That was very well written very good job :)

Great stuff! long but definately worth reading, keep up the great work

ambika :)

Amazing job i love it very well written keep up the good work

Awww, that's such a good poem... the flow was exquisite. Awesome job, elizabeth!
Love always,
~BJ~

This was probably one of the most amazing, original poems i've ever read. i love the seagull, the ocean, the title, the description... everything was perfect. i'm usually good at picking out mistakes, but here, i find none. awesome job. i loved this poem, and keep up the awesome work. 5/5

Okay this is actually my favorite poem of yours and i can see why all you got was nice comments you used a great vocab and this i guess would be more of a monolouge and you broke it up as it should be broken up uhh i got kinda confused in this part

that I can take a step back,
and build my life again,
brick by lonely brick, with sand to hold it together.
Sand and water, like the substance underneath my suddenly cold feet.
and I turn around,
hang my head,
and admit defeat.

it was like you were saying you could finally start building up your life and then the next sentence for some unknown reason (because you didn't tell us) everything is going downhill again

but yeah best poem ive read from you so far so great job 5/5

Nice job :)

Amazing imagination & inspiration can been seen behind these lines
love
amy

This one is much better. It flows well structurally which made it easier to read. And that flow made me want to keep reading. And the idea was brilliant. However, you still need to check those and's. There are too many. If you could replace the and by putting -ing on the end of a verb, or just delete the and all together, then that would be better. Anyways good write.

WOW - that is the first word that comes to my mind. This is an amazing poem! It was sad, but I loved how it turned in to being full of hope at the end. You have a lot of talent for writing. Keep using your skills! Take care.
> Kiesha

Speechless? haha

This was really outstanding, Maybe I'm a bit biased because I love nautical themes. But the language, the imagery and the structure of this poem were superb. Great work.

And thanks so much for your comment on mine.

~~Lydia O

Another breathtakingly good poem. You're really good at capturing the setting and taking the reader on a journey of emotion. I liked the presence of the seagull and I especially liked the part when you said it "screams at me in a clear, beautiful voice" that contradiction was very clever. My only suggestion is the second stanza is quite long and has many commas but no full stops. Maybe adding a few would break the lengthy verse up and make it a bit easier to read. Very well done, The ending two lines gave the poem a strong finale.

You are one talented writer girl... every poem i read of yours just keeps getting better and better and this one is no exception.. it was beautifuly written and amazingly original... keep it up...

You are one talented writer girl... every poem i read of yours just keeps getting better and better and this one is no exception.. it was beautifuly written and amazingly original... keep it up...

Awesome job! I love it. Keep it up. I love how you put all of this stuff into words. It is great!

B-e-a-utiful, greatly written. another one for my faves. ;) 5.5 bravo