by Jamie Sep 24, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
The black twists and turns |
by Carmen
Whoah... this should be under the dark poems. awesome job. really sad, and very true. 5/5 |
I like your 4th and 5th stanza's....but i think it would be so much bette w/o the "yeah.." also in the last one....you said "yeah" agian and it didnt sound bad but it also didnt make the poem that much better....so w/o it i think you would have an outstanding poem....5/5 |
Very good it was full of emotion good job5/5 |
Wow...If I could give this a higher amount, I would...5/5 no doubt!!! This is so beautiful...so powerful...so well written. Great Job! |