Downward spiral
by shawn hoskins Sep 24, 2005
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I don't know why things have to be this way,my life is going under there is nothing left for me i need to end this i don't want to stay, i'm going down a downward spiral fallen further than ever before, i cant see any other way, it's as if i'm crying out but no one hears my shouts, where did things go so wrong seems i've lost my will to go on, i just feel everyone could care less i'm the only one to blame for all this mess, i don't see no light at the end of this tunnel i see someone digging a grave and it looks like i'm holding the shovel. |
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19 years ago
Excellent poem
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19 years ago
by Jamie
K I think this is SOOOO cool the ending was sweeeeeeet the only thing i would have changed it the little double negative you used at the end *i dont see no light* i think should be changed to *i dont see any light*
other then that I think you need to put your work into stanzas....
but like i could so see this poem just being screamed when its read it was so good i love the last lines so much lol
5/5!!!!!!!!!!
