K I think this is SOOOO cool the ending was sweeeeeeet the only thing i would have changed it the little double negative you used at the end *i dont see no light* i think should be changed to *i dont see any light*

other then that I think you need to put your work into stanzas....

but like i could so see this poem just being screamed when its read it was so good i love the last lines so much lol

5/5!!!!!!!!!!

Excellent poem