by Katlynn Sep 24, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
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What can i do? |
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Ok I've noticed you poem's stanza's are just a bunch of words thrown together. Try making each stanza the same size. It not only helps the reader read it better, it also makes it look more organized. Used capitolization and use commas, periods, ect. No critisism just advice. |
by xX-jess-Xx
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Great job, i love your writing. 5/5 jesx |
by Jerry Scott
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You really pull the reader into the character's head. Very good job. unique style for his poem too. |
by Truest Lies
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At first I thought that he was in the hospital and you were mourning him, but as it was, I still liked it. |
by Tara Kay
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Aww, its sad, isnt it. But you gave it some passion that i loved. |