Wow you are seriously an awsome dark poem writer....5/5....i would add you to my fav's except i already have 20...maybe someday i'll be able to add you...b/c i love your style...my fav part is where you said "ah yes..." that made me smile ha great poem!

Oh wow!! Your fifteen?..and wrote a masterpeice like that?! WoW! what an inspiration to you are! This peice was so ....I don't know I could find a million words!...Loved this peice..I really liked how you spoke from way back when...saying "says you"...and things like that! It was different and I really enjoyed it!
Wonderful write!
~Chelsey~

"Fly child take heed of the darkness in sin" i was just wondering if you need a coma after the fly child? i wasn't sure. but hey wonderful poem a pleasure to read. the emotion throghout it was strong. great poem!

~Jacklyn