Okay really good it was very awesome im going to give it a 4/5 because you lost your rhyming ability in the last two stanzas and i dont think the ending stuied the poem other then that great job

I thought it was very good nothing wrong with it your a good writer

Wow... that is such a good poem. It was superbly written only I do not completely understand the vew you want to make. If you could, would you explain it in my forum?

I already read this poem before you even answered my forum request. lol

Very creative!!

Nice last stanza, it really stands out !!!

xxx cici xxx

Most of this was nicely worded, again well done

I like this one as well..you definetly have a talent for writting..

I think I like this poem best so far, I like the air of mysterious wonder it seems to give off.

My favourite lines were:

"
Darkness surrounds with pastel glow
Time moves forward though much to slow
Light as a feather you search for the floor
Pray for the wind to blow no more"

I absolutely heart the last line. =)

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(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

That was really deep, but I liked it. a lot.
I get that feeling too, of being too light, just floating about...

Good Writing!
beth

I liked this line
As though nothing else exists
Sight is darkened into the abyss
but i didnt like the ending of it.. but by far one of the best poems i have read of yours. 5/5

Magnificent.

-Taylor

That was great. i feel like that a lot. i really loved it. it was beauitful. keep up the good work
Emma 5/5