Drew, I really enjoyed this poem, I liked the ideas you used and the different descriptions that were used throughout, however the one problem I had was the use of full stops, for some reason they disrupted my reading and lifted me from my trance after a few stanzas it was quite annoying as I had to re immerse myself in your writing, the poem itself was lovely to read I thought you wrote it very well, that was my only problem, well done to you =)
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I Fell In Love With This Poem, I Love Nature Poems, You Expressed Nature So Beautifuly In Words No one Would Ever Think To Use, Your Uniqueness Caught My Eye And Captured My Heart 5/5 *Friends For Life* xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Well written great emotion & detail
will have to read your others

Drew, I love the poem. it has a magical and mysterious air to it. Good write.

Warm regards,

Steve

Ok I love the rythym here, It's very strong and compliments the poem's overall feel. You used great discriptive adjectives, Which create a very vivid image of what you were trying to discribe. Maybe think of a different word then contrast, in the 5th stanza,because its sortof overkills the idea of "contrast" Other than that great work,you are very talented!

Wow...this was awsome...i love your descriptions....my fav part was the very last stanza...it was so magical like...5/5

Very beautiful poem. It really drew me in with all the details. It was so lifelike i could almost see it! Amazing work! 5/5

Love
Haily

Wow !!! that was a good read... i liked the way u brought all the elements together...fire,rain,breeze... was s good read !!
its unique !
i havent read another poem in this site quiet as DIFFERENT as this one ...
i'll add you to my favourites : )

Wow.......your incredible ive never read a poem more despcritive then that....like i really got a feeling for this poem and i really enjoyed reading it I did get kind of confused as where the whole thing switched from talking about the dancer and then to yourself but when i read it through a few more times i think i understood but amazing job i mean that

her hips switched and shifted
just as an ocean’s tide.
waving up and down her figure.
her movements matched perfectly

that was brilliant and the way you described the snakes tounge as ever-curious was so interesting very nice poem

if i could rate higher then a five i would!!

Hm... this poem is nice and descriptive, but you really should capitalize and puntuate properly. it makes the poem look better. also, most of the sentances didn't make sense, kinda like they were all jumbled together; or at least the first stanza was poorly done. i thnk you could redo that. otherwise, i love the description of this poem.

I love it. Brilliant and vivid imagery combined with superlative word choices. Very well done.

Very magical and mystical and so unique. I enjoyed reading this one, I was able to visualize it all. You painted quite a picture.....

Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

A beautifully described scene though out the poem. The images you conveyed were detailed enough to bring the poem to life. My favourite couple of lines were “her hips switched and shifted -
just like an ocean’s tide.” Although most of the imagery was truly original, this particular one did it for me.
I have no real suggestions other than in some places the poem lacked punctuation, then in others it had a sufficient amount. Also capitalising “I” could neaten it up a little.
Lovely write, with amazing images. Thanks for sharing.

This is a really descriptive poem, i loved it! it was really beautiful...

~*Lollipop Sweetie*~

Wow that was brilliant as always, i think this new point of view, its simplicity, and the story it tells combines to make it a really fine piece. Geez your getting alot of comments and votes these days aye. I can see why though.

Sexily beautiful, wonderful imagery :)