I asked the time to pass and make things whole
To clear the lies and thoughts surrounding me
Time passed but everything stayed as before
The lies that dwelt around i still could see
I realized it is i who should change
not to keep pase with the world or fit in
but in a world that for me seems so strange
i'd have to give it out what i have in
And tell it the secret i have inside
And show what no man ever could reveal
and give it vwhat in me since long did hide
and maybe, just maybe then it could heal
If all to help would come or none i'll try
Untill it whole becomes or till i die
Thank you for you comments on my sonnet, deeply appreciated.
You have asked me to review this write and advised me that the rhyme scheme for this piece was abab cdcd efef gg. The write was fine, however to be frank, it does not conform to the rhyme scheme. As the 1st line of the 1st stanza does not rhyme with the 3rd line of the 1st stanza. Also the 2nd line of the 2nd stanza does not rhyme with the 4th line of the 2nd stanza.
You will therefore have to rework the rhyming to conform with the requirements set forth for the form.