Excellent poem, it was really deep but i know how you feel and it sucks. Keep it up and kia kaha...(stay strong). Luv Nicole =)

Hun... please... listen to me.
you can't leave... i love u way to much for that.
take care of urself k?
jos xoxoxo

Woah.. that was strongf and powerful! it was really well written i like the way ui wrote it!! u have alot of talent so plz dont ever stop writting!! and im here if u wanna talk xox lov yaa 5/5

I love that sooo much right now !!1

im not having a good day that helped me relize a lot !!!

Great job !!

Aww hun, you are on my faves tooh =D, You are such a beautiful writer I loved this poem, yesterday I had a rough day & I can really relate to this, it helped me a lot, great job hun keep it up

Aww bbz...stay strong we all need you here...chin up lil soldja

i love ya poems

thnx for ur comments much appreciated

-angel-
take it easy

Oh. what an amazing poem. seriously...it was so powerfull. i really like the last bit... "This melancholy pain rips me apart,
I try to think back right to the start.
They say there's always a trigger,
But the only trigger is under my finger.
Without life there is no pain,
Without guts, you cannot gain.
So I'll free myself of expectations,
Maybe tonight I'll find salvation.
Many may think that it isn't right,
But I'm sick of playing this game in spite.
This is right for me in my head,
Going to a better place that lies ahead."

and the ending. it was amazing, beautiful write take care huni xx

Wow.. that was a really good poem, it was really deep, and showed alot of emotion in it, had a great flow and amazing rhyming, it seems like you must've put alot of thought into it, and not just something at the top of your head, great job, and keep up the good work, 5/5

Hey hang in there i think we all know how youre feeling, and it sucks caz no one can really help..only you can help yourself really caz probaly noone around you knows how down youre feeling...hang in there though dont let people do this to you, rise above and show them how strong you are and when you suceed itll be no thanks to them take care xxx

Im really sorry you feel this way, i know what you mean though. and this poem was amazing sometimes the rhymes were off but the greatness of the piece made up for that lol

This melancholy pain rips me apart,
I try to think back right to the start.
They say there's always a trigger,
But the only trigger is under my finger.

that was my favorite very clever

your awesome

5/5

You will be so so wrong if you commit suicide...that's it...

Just too good to comment on...love

I really like all your poems they are really great. i love to right peoms. i put some on here but there not all that great.