I really liked the ending,
its well written, i enjoyed reading it,

Good poem it lost flo in the 2nd stanza but got it again n the 3rd good job over all 4/5

D A M N. That poem had so much emotion in it. i could really feel alot while reading it. I love ur work and hope 2 c more soon 5/5
Luv
Paulette

It Had a Fluid Flow, Graceful Word Choice, I Fell In Love With The Poems Brilliance Of Simplicity, Yet Its Depth Of Truth 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Great job i loved your 3rd part that read
"Lightening strikes my body
Tearing me in two
Wanting to hold on
But not knowing what to do" I just love that line rolls of the toung and makes me feel good after i say it

Wonderful work. You have great imagery and flow in this poem.

Wow..I feel the same way EVERYDAY of my life. I hope u get happier and dont get stuck all sad like me! So cheer up gizmo =D

Great job!

I have no C.C. for you only because i really liked the whyme scheme and the story line. i enjoyed your metaphores aswell.

You`re a great writer It was really good.