Wow.
Amazingly good! Needs improvement? Yeah right... lol 5/5!

God Bless
Saiya

This poem was good b/c it had alot of describing and comparing phrases...i liked it alot...5/5...and thanks a bunch for voting and commenting on mine...it meant alot to me...l8r, jen

You have a wide range of vocabulary and used it perfectly in this poem. It's perfect. Honestly it doesn't need improving. Well done, great work x

Hey
great job! 5/5

Ok some minor editings.
their target, not they're
'and will never think to seize" it might be me, but i dont really understand this.....

HOWever, this was a brillient poem. very abstract and extreamly visual. the images are very clear, and the overall effect is brillient

Ruby

Great discriptions and imergry.

i love the poem, dont think it needs much improvmenrt at all

Great poem. It was well thought out and has a good rhyming scheme. I wouldn't change a thing. 5/5

Gr8 poem...fabulous use of methaphores n stuff...wow...5/5!
~*Who Cares?*~

I liked ur poem
its full of emotion and wonderful written :)
keep it up
Yours
Nema
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Beauitful poem. i loved it. it was simply moving. keep up the good work.
Emma 5/5