Wow. That is...... truly amazing! You have amazing talent and such a way of writing! Wow. that is defenitely worth much more than a 5! Wow!

Brooke

Wow thats amazing i the best part is that you showed that living for some one is the best love ever very sad but very very good keep up the good work 5.5

This is really well written, really strong, deep, extremely powerful. excellent job

WOAH! That is one looooooooong poem. Pretty good though. You spelled where wrong in this stanza:

It feels so dark
in this forgotten home
we're this young man sits
with his head down, all alone

I luved your poem it means so much to me lol u did a realy good job keep writing

Truelly an unforgettable collection of words. pieced together so beautifully. it brings love and sacrifice together.. a poem i wont forget...

REALY GREAT i dont even kno what to say really you need 2 try to get that published seriously that is awsome writin!! keep it up...*hugs* Lynzie Kae

I love the dialogue, it allowed a fairly long poem to be quite interesting. You made a pretty nice story, too. Great job!