by Fighter (Ariane L.) Sep 29, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
Looking into the candle, anger rages within as I remember. |
by ScarletHaze
Even though its made up the way you write it makes you think it did. awesome draft. xox |
Great draft althouh teh organization is off like she said play with the struture a lil . hiope things turn out right . looking foward to the final draftif ther is one . |
Great draft althouh teh organization is off like she said play with the struture a lil . hiope things turn out right . looking foward to the final draftif ther is one . |
by Pure Silence
Great concept, but somethings off, this draft is heading in the right direction though hun, maybe play around with the structure or something:) |
The flow could use a little bit of work...but like you said it was only a draft....good job n/e way it was very dark....great poem...4/5 |