by Dave Sep 30, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
As i sit here staring at the sky |
by ALEX
Spooky. I love your word choice. It sounds like a man looking back at his life, and looking ahead to death. Thinking about endings, which are obviously sad. I really like it. =] 5/5 |
by Natalie
The flow in this was okay, You could go through and comb a few uneeded words out to help it flow better. The rhyming was good, sometimes doing the AABB scheme is hard without making the rhymes sound forced. But, you did pretty good. 5/5 |
by ASPHYXIATED
This was short yet felt long? well done, the flow was great and the idea was diffrent! |