Comments : Modern Day Romeo and Juliet

  • 19 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    This is a very interesting piece. Addiction is a sad thing to deal with, you write about it very passionately.
    I do have this one suggestion. In this stanza:

    "each day goes by so quick
    slowly these feelings begin to win
    she wins over that empty part
    winning over him"

    The word "win" and "winning" is used way too many times. It makes it very repititious and takes away from the poem.
    Other than that, the poem is really good. Take care~Holly

  • 18 years ago

    by -Beauty-

    HoTT Hott Hott...2 Tell u the truth I was speachless after I Read This P()3M!!!!So True!!!!!!Good Writing!!

  • 18 years ago

    by PassingAngel

    Wow. That is truely excellent. The flow is amazing. I love it. And the rhyming just fits perfectly together. I love the wording and everything about this poem. I gave you a 5 because you deserve it. Good job. Keep it up. 5/5.
    -waves-

    -Passing