by Dave Sep 30, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
The guilty moon is on the rise |
by ALEX
"my story is the same as all" |
by Melpomene
You write amazing dark poems i enjoy them all. Well done on a nicely penned dark poem. 5/5 ~mel |
by Vegetable
Hmmm, very intresting, I have a few suggestions though! 1) Guilty is randomly repeated three times, and in such a short poem, that takes away from the meaning of the repeated word 2) rise and lie dont rhyme 3) some of your rhymes sound forced ("the innocent man who's friends will hale |
Nice poem, really well written. I liked the words you've used in it. |
by XxTeArSxX17
Nice job like the flow alot keep up the good work and thanks so much for your comment |