by Chris Oct 1, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
This is kind of written more like a song... in way. but whatever. |
Wow. chris.. ignore what that one chick said. the words REPEAT cuz its a SONG. yea... |
by Vegetable
Hmm this is pretty good. There is too much repitition of the words pain,stain, and "but you don't even know" which makes them loose some of their power. The rhyme scheme is random, and inconsistant, which throws off the flow. Its good other than that |