I like this one very much it gave me the feeling that the person was getting weaker as it went on

I felt every word. :)

Hmm...that was exceptional in a weird way. I thought the way it went was very well done. Nice job.
~Faith

Okay the rhyme scheme was weird!!!!!!! it took me until the last stanza to get what you were doing so natually the flow was awkward i think it would have been better if the two lines between each "heres my everyting" rhymed but other then that the concept was great you used great images

The red devine,
Slips down my arm,

that and the first two lines were AWESOME good job

4/5

Self harm, something that really hurts me when i read it, because of having a history of it, and also because i know how it feels to feel the pain. i try to avoid reading poems of this nature, but i loved this one, i cannot explain why, it just had something different. keep writing
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"Here the final alarm" - do you mean "hear" or "here's"?

i think you do a great job of saying a lot here without directly coming out and saying anything at all :)

Great poem it was excellent there is a lot of emotion in it. It flowed well and it all made sense......

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