A candle

Great job i really like it i have u as one of my favorites and hope that u could add me

Love
micky

I love this poem, it's short yet it gets the point across to the reader and it's strong. i actually like it because it's simply short and has such power to it. the only thing i would like to suggest is that you repeat "May" so many times.

i think that the last five "May"s can actually be taken out. read over it without the word i think you would like it better. least i do.

this is only a suggestion don't take offence.

~Jacklyn

Interesting depiction of a candle. enjoyed this write! you got talent, keep up the good work.

What an interesting poem about a candle. Written with creative diction. Short and to the point...well done.

Now about my poem "Familiar Faces."
Dementia is a very horrible disease that causes gradual deteriation of the brain and everyday functions. Memory loss is the worst symptom. Memory of people, places, important events. However, despite how some people steriotype them they remain "sane" in the sense the only thing that has changed is their memory. They do have flashbacks and reaslise what's going on sometimes too. The hidden message is this, imagine someone with dementia actually did write this, the fact they can still construct a poem of their thoughts shows they're are still capable of feeling and wanting to share. I know this is a hard message to get, but I hope it's logical, and I hope it makes sense. Anyway thanks for asking...take care,
Silver

Hmmmm it has a very mysterious quality to it i dont know if i fully understand it, it leaves me wanting to understand it and thats a good thing, NB: my poem 'the funeral' is about my grandpa who died last month hes the first person that i know who has died and yep i wrote a poem about it