~*WoW that was REALLY good i loved it.. your a very good writer and im not juss saying that u really r, and im srry if this is true...good luck*~ XoXo

Its freakin awesome keep it up 5/5 really its great i wish i could write like that but i cant so ill just keep reading urs lol well peace

Love,
Anthony

This was excellent, i totally loved it and i hope that youre okay xxx

Nice one...it's different and unique...it tells straight from your heart and i love it...

'Whispering loving words to make me un-sad'
I feel that maybe change the word un-sad to something like smile, or any words that can express what you want us to feel, 'cause 'un-sad' seems to disturb the flow alittle. Anyway, maybe it's just me, if that is so, ignore me. =)

Nonetheless, I really enjoyed this piece, all the emotions are there, naked and felt. The last line brings an even more powerful emotion, something like hopelessness. Great write! =D