I Smile

I scrolled right down to see your very first poem, having read a couple of crackers. You have come a long way since this, but this is far from being poor. It just doesn't have a very good flow to it, despite sending a clear message in very few words.

Short, but very effective. your point comes across well.. Nice work!

You're writing has certainly changed, its amazing to see how far you've come.
Although this is much better then my first submission that i deleted, lol
love
~Em

Nice, not too deep - but not at all shallow. The words were well chosen. I thought I'd comment on your poem you submitted first, because rarely anyone comments on my oldest poems, and it's nice when you get the odd comment on a poem even you haven't read for a while! Great work - you have improved a lot from this piece, though thats not to say this piece is in any way, shape or form bad!

Peace. [Sole]

I liked this one. It was short but it still said a lot. :) *5/5*