by RainbowSlider Oct 3, 2005
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
I can nuture you if you will nuture me. |
by silvershoes
Is this related to the other poem I commented twice? |
I really like the bit about the mire of our ignorance. |
I like this-but it seems to end too abruptly.It feels like it needs just a little something more, not sure what.In stanza two line one I would change 'stupid' to 'naive'.But actually all the stanzas are each well written.The carpet metaphor is excellent.Good work on this one. |
by kyky
I realy like it, its not rite to always take and never give anything back =P |
by brittany
Nicely done :) |