Nicely done :)

I realy like it, its not rite to always take and never give anything back =P

I like this-but it seems to end too abruptly.It feels like it needs just a little something more, not sure what.In stanza two line one I would change 'stupid' to 'naive'.But actually all the stanzas are each well written.The carpet metaphor is excellent.Good work on this one.

I really like the bit about the mire of our ignorance.

Is this related to the other poem I commented twice?

I like the use of the word 'mire' in this poem. Very nice.

5/5