by aaron c s Oct 3, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
It's only been two days since I saw you last, |
Oh how lovely. So romantic and expressive, 5/5. You did this really well; constantly referring to the date's makes it more effective. Nice one ^_~ |
by Britney
Awwl soo sweet. I absolutlely loved this. Whoever you love this much is def. a lucky person~ keep up the great work ~ it had a wonderful flow and it went together very nicely. 5/5~ xox take care xox |
by N J Thornton
Awww this is so sweet, a very soppy love poem. I liked the idea you had about the two days, two weeks, two months, and two years. It worked well in the first few stanzas but the first line of the fourth stanza is very long, and could do with some shortening or splitting into two lines. The last line was a short a sweet ending, but the use of "gonna" in the last line put me off. If you change it to "going to" it will sound better. Thanks for sharing, keep it up. |
by Justin
Aww so sweet.. great poem, I loved it, very cute and expressed alot of emotion, 5/5 |