Wow ur off to an excellent start it was a true pleasure reading this poem. it had a very nice flow and i loved the wording great job 5/5 xox

Wow another great one there once again the words that you use to discribe everything so simple but so great

Another good piece. Quite inspirational in fact. The flow, though a little more complex than "You cannot colour what is grey" was still quite tantalising. Looking forward to seeing more of your work.

I really liked this poem, the flow and meaning of it was good.

Like your other poems, this poem has a wide range of vocabulary. It was nicely put in a very dreamy-like way. I enjoyed all three of your poems. It was well fantasized.

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Another great poem! Good job! My favorite part (yet again) was the ending! How do you do it so well? Wow!

"As the city lights blend into
This one nostalgic deep blue sky,
Your breath, it is my leaving song
As I kiss you this last goodbye."

Amazing ending!!!!! And I really loved the entire poem as well!
~BJ~

Another amazing poem!
My favorite stanza was,

"As the city lights blend into
This one nostalgic deep blue sky,
Your breath, it is my leaving song
As I kiss you this last goodbye."

Great ending, it really painted a lovely picture. I love your work, good job!

It has nice almost soft read to it. Imagery is not used enough in this type of poem usually so I enjoyed yours even more as it contained just enough. Loved reading it.

Have you noticed so many people love ur last stanza of each poem? you finish on such a strong note with all your poems. through out the poems i have read by you, you continue to show an extensive vocabluary. it makes it that much eaiser to really connect with. this poem was not as abstract so some of your others. the whole poem ahs a dreamy feel to it that is very nice. this one is also a bit easier to read then some of your others. one of your best.

Ruby

Ruby is right your last stanzas are all great love this poem

Okay, I admit it. I'm hooked on your writing now. The way the words come out, not forced, wield their way into my heart.