Amusing story. the strange thing is thats its a song...not really a poem.
But good, anyway.

Good Writing!
beth

Odd as a song or as a poem have to give ya props for the effort just not really my cup of tea

Oh a very amusing story haha. Anyway, I really liked this song. It's so fluent and one of those that you really want to hear to music and then see on the shelves in music shops. The first stanza or verse was my favourite, and the chorus was brilliant too. In fact, it was all good.
Only thing, in the first stanza “noone” should be “no one.”
Very well written, keep it up!

Oh a very amusing story haha. Anyway, I really liked this song. It's so fluent and one of those that you really want to hear to music and then see on the shelves in music shops. The first stanza or verse was my favourite, and the chorus was brilliant too. In fact, it was all good.
Only thing, in the first stanza “noone” should be “no one.”
Very well written, keep it up!

Sorry about the double posting, and I forgot to mention, this deserves more than the 3 it has been given.

Wow Britney Spears actually has some good use. Good lyrics. Im wondering how the music sounds like. Should be really interesting. If you ever get this online recording send me a message.

Once again a great poem or song or whatever. its got such a great idea behind it. maybe try writing music to go with it? exellenct work

Ruby

Another great song 5/5