Oh wow!!!!!!!!!! its amazing. i cried reading this..seriously its ...wow. excellent job.

Wow so very well writen excelent job you have really captured the emotion perfectly

Really beautiful poem, you've expressed the sadness in a clever way. I really like it.

XxX Cici XxX

Aww.. that was so deep.. i loved ur rhyme and ur words.. they wer vey touching and i cud almost feel ur emotions.. i reli lykd ur first stanza
take care
God bless

The death of a baby is such a sad thing...5/5....i loved how you wrote this the flow was awsome and i liked how every line in each stanza rhymed....i tried that w/ my one poem and let me tell you its quite hard to do but you did a great job..5/5

I am very sorry about your sister. The poem was very deep, and that it was true made it very beautiful, as well as extremely sad. The only mistake, or perhaps just a matter of style, that I picked up was 'The times we met "where" few,' I suppose that it would be correct if it was the times we met "were" few. But its nothing, really. Just a bit of nit-picking for a perfectionist.

Good Writing!
beth

Thank you guys for commenting on this poem i greatly appreciate it. thanxs

Live life well keep in touch

Wow this is very touching. The only thing I have as a suggestion is in 3rd stanza the rhyme seems unnatural, I think it might be overkill to put "few" and "dew" together. It was very good otherwise.

Very sad poem. I'm sorry to hear about your sister.

That's a beautiful poem. I am really sorry what happen, I'm glad you took the time to write this, I enjoyed reading it.

Wow hunn awesome poem.. the flow is very good.. but sad tho.. stay strong okay.. if u need ne one to talk to i'll be here=)

Sorry to hear about your sister... this poem was so very sad but you wrote it with strengh and did a very nice job... keep it up...

sammie

That was so sweet and heartfelt. Keep it up. *5/5*

Very strong peice, youreally wrote it very well. it has a grat flow and very strong feelings.

5/5

I love it it is good i am so sorry for you

I love this poem. great job. I lost my sister when she was 27 years old. I walked into her house and found her in her bed. nice job on the poem.

Wow that a really sweet but sad poem. great work though i mean it.