by Erin Oct 5, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Your eyes make my heart beat faster, your touch makes my thoughts wander. |
by Falling Up
Hey i love your poem.. it flows soo well.. the only thing that is that (if u were trying to go for a rhyming poem) a few stanzas near the end dont rhyme... so just letting you know that if u startto make it rhyme, it sounds unright to have only 2 lines out of the whole poem not rhyme.. but other than that it was awesome.. keep up the good work, and please comment on my poetry, and any critisizm u might have, or anything good u might have to say... Thanks! |