Beautiful poem !!
Really nicely written, i liked it a lot.
The rhymes aren't planned to be in certain patrts which makes it read more naturally.

xxx cici xxx

OMG i loved it
keep up the great work babe 5/5 plz return the favour

Pretty good, not my usual style but pretty good. One thing though, remember that you don't have to have complete sentences.

Like
~ lie here for hours on my bed
thinking of all the things I could've said
To explain all my feelings for you
I take a knife and carve your name
upon my soft delicate skin
The stress you cause is enough to kill me
So let the final pain begin.